please help how does my movie story sound?
Friday, December 19th, 2008 | Movies
Pokiri A asked:
Bhavani is the area’s most influential and feared don. The police are searching for him harder then ever and he feels that his criminals are unfit for this. He wants a mentally and physically strong person in his gang. Bhavani kills Ram’s Parents and drop Ram out in the streets. There Ram and the other members of the streets and gangs constantly fight and kill and do anything for food, shelter, and water. They don’t care about anything else. Ram grows up in a violent setting and soon gets used to it stealing, killing, and doing whatever that is possible. The cops come and arrest him and he gets taken to court where he explains how he is doing this to survive. Ram’s uncle whom is a famous lawyer fights his way through the case and takes Ram to his house where he is introduced to the family setting. He slowly starts learning about the relationships and about love. His step brother is a drug addict who comes home and abuses the family using the gun to
Bhavani is the area’s most influential and feared don. The police are searching for him harder then ever and he feels that his criminals are unfit for this. He wants a mentally and physically strong person in his gang. Bhavani kills Ram’s Parents and drop Ram out in the streets. There Ram and the other members of the streets and gangs constantly fight and kill and do anything for food, shelter, and water. They don’t care about anything else. Ram grows up in a violent setting and soon gets used to it stealing, killing, and doing whatever that is possible. The cops come and arrest him and he gets taken to court where he explains how he is doing this to survive. Ram’s uncle whom is a famous lawyer fights his way through the case and takes Ram to his house where he is introduced to the family setting. He slowly starts learning about the relationships and about love. His step brother is a drug addict who comes home and abuses the family using the gun to
2 Comments to please help how does my movie story sound?
you should really write leaving some space, no way I’m gonna read all of that, all the letters together seem a mess.
Sorry
December 24, 2008
it sounds a little busy to me. It started off good but then that whole taken home and taught to love thing lost me. I like the whole street gang thing though.
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